Poem: Running In The Fall

Oct 24, 2011 By Caramel-Marek, 12
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Running. Jumping. Playing.

Falling. Crying. Wet tears falling.

Down
            Down
                        Down

Splashing.

Woman running. Picking up. Soothing.

Whispering. Sniffling. Quiet.

Silence.

Wind blows through. Branches rustle. Leaves fall.

Giggling. Laughing. Smiling. No more tears.

Running. Grabbing. Catching.

One
            Two
                        Three

Red, yellow, orange.

Laughing. Smiles. Happiness.
 

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Raptorman2012 March 27, 2012 - 4:43am

What a poem!!!! Great Job you are good at creativity!!!! :D

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Trisha March 13, 2012 - 2:47am

I really like this :)

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writer_girl_ February 17, 2012 - 3:17pm

I Like the way it's typed,and the poem itself

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Ella February 15, 2012 - 8:40am

I love your poem! It's beautiful, but it needs more rhythm

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Hanakin November 30, 2011 - 9:47am
I loved this Poem. I especially like the format. I look forward to seeing more poems from you. Maybe one for each season?
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Rachel Catherine November 16, 2011 - 6:09pm

I love your poem.

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Caramel-Marek November 6, 2011 - 2:44pm

Thank you for your comment! I'll work on it!

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Writerstime November 4, 2011 - 3:41pm
my teacher usually has 2 comments and one wish for presentations. My comments are that it was well thought of, catchy and beautiful, but its downfall is that I think it should have more rhyming words in it.
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Writerstime November 4, 2011 - 3:39pm
what a lovely poem.
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Caramel-Marek November 2, 2011 - 6:12pm

By the way if you like this poem, I'm coming out with another kind of poem. It will be published on Monday. Thanks for your support!

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Caramel-Marek October 31, 2011 - 10:26am
I didn't add a picture. Looks like someone added one for me! :)
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greensalmon October 31, 2011 - 5:35am
i DONT get it!!
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AnikaP October 25, 2011 - 5:34pm

That poem is beautiful! Keep it up.