A Midnight Adventure

Oct 14, 2014 By Saish, 10
Deepa Gopal's picture

It is past 11:00 pm. Your best friend and you are in your tent on your camping trip. As you are talking, you suddenly see something. A shadow passes along your tent, pauses near your tent. As you watch with growing anxiety, the shadow comes closer and pauses at the entrance to your tent and then moves away. Grabbing a torch, you unzip the tent and look out...

The night sky was dark and there were many clouds. The stars were not twinkling. There was no breeze. Everything was silent and still. Shawn and I decided we had to see what was going on. So we put our shoes on hurriedly and stepped out of the tent.

We were both very cold and shivering. It was not very cold outside but we were still shivering. Shawn whispered that he was a little freaked out by how silent everything was. I was scared too but did not say anything.

We went to the next tent and called to our two buddies there. No one answered. I flashed the light in and saw that it was empty. We looked at each other and then hurried to the next tent. This was empty also.
What is going on here we wondered. We looked around and saw nothing but just darkness all around. We decided to move towards the place where we meet for breakfast each morning.

As we crept along, we heard leaves rustling and the night creatures making tiny noises. It was getting really freaky. Suddenly Shawn grabbed me and said, “look, over there!” Down in the break area, we saw small lights appearing.

Then suddenly from behind us, we felt something tap our shoulder. We both yelled loudly and raced towards the small lights. We reached the breakfast spot and ran towards the benches. Suddenly, there was this explosion. The lights came on and we saw all our friends and teachers standing there laughing and smiling.

“Happy Birthday!” yelled everyone. I looked at my watch and saw that it was after midnight and it was now my birthday.
 

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the real xander January 6, 2022 - 11:13am
camping is cool and fun!
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B0pper July 11, 2020 - 11:16am
i like the plot, except i think it rushes too quick
Vicky's picture
Vicky April 3, 2020 - 8:44pm
Wait, why did it change from second person to first person?
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smalltiger August 8, 2020 - 12:21am
Yeah kinda confusing.
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Ada-B April 6, 2017 - 11:56am

That story was Really cool!!???

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Meghan December 11, 2016 - 6:26pm

I loved the story, but some things in the story was unclear and a little bit confusing, but keep writing and improving your work(;

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maclinf May 27, 2015 - 11:01am

Good story keep it up.

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devonm3 May 13, 2015 - 12:11pm

if me and my friend maclin were camping we would see what made the shawdow

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devonm3 May 13, 2015 - 11:39am

this story is AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Braeden1 May 11, 2015 - 12:52pm

lol love it

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FATIN NORAINI May 3, 2015 - 6:55am

surprise!!

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delfinas May 1, 2015 - 7:33am

this story had a big twist in the end I thought that there was actually going to be like a bear or something but it was just a birthday surprise this was a really cool camping story.

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estherp April 9, 2015 - 6:09am
Wow good job
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aidenh2 March 2, 2015 - 12:06pm

This is amazing of how in detail it goes into.

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cristianm2 February 27, 2015 - 11:11am

that was enjoy able

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aidenh2 February 27, 2015 - 10:32am

Trippy

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nutsag February 26, 2015 - 6:01am

I LOVE THAT

scaredy doo
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kiaunag February 22, 2015 - 1:22pm

I loved your story! I must say the dead end silence was freaky. Nice twist on the ending!

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julietter February 9, 2015 - 5:57am

wow that's cool

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graceb4 February 3, 2015 - 9:55am
Oh my gosh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I
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andrewd2 January 27, 2015 - 6:25am

Cool

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Zcat January 26, 2015 - 2:10pm

Camping is fun!

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graceb4 January 26, 2015 - 9:41am

I love writing!!!! Keep up the good work!!!!!

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graceb4 January 26, 2015 - 9:40am

I love your story and I actually stayed up till 12:00 and I screamed " happy birthday!!!!

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graysonc January 23, 2015 - 10:59am

i like camping

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todds January 21, 2015 - 4:30am

weird story

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benjamind3 January 15, 2015 - 9:15am

Great story

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Sumanth123 December 28, 2014 - 5:34pm

I thought it was just a dream! You really tricked me in your writing

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cassiew December 26, 2014 - 6:50am

Great Story!:D

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Tressa December 16, 2014 - 8:58am
Awesome story! I enjoyed it. :) Did this actually happen to you?
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ciaobella May 12, 2015 - 5:01am

I really want to know too! Did this happen to you?

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giannio December 13, 2014 - 9:46pm

love slepping out side

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phineus11122223... December 8, 2014 - 12:07pm

It was scary but it was are really good story but i was scared

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mackenzie123 November 21, 2014 - 11:30am

cool

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willt November 21, 2014 - 8:52am

I like the twist ending, I thought there was going to be a scary ending.

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megank2 November 18, 2014 - 8:53am

At first I thought something was going to happen then later in the article it was just a birthday present! Great work! Keep writing!!!

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warren6 November 12, 2014 - 7:30am

i really enjoyed this!

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zhaoshijie November 12, 2014 - 5:15am

Hmmmm,i think u can describe your feelings in the tent and what u felt like when the teachers and friends had a surprise party for you !! Anyway,great job well done!:):):)

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mackenzieguilliams November 11, 2014 - 11:35am

i like it,
it needs more detail:[

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daniellem2 November 9, 2014 - 9:45am

Love it I really want to go camping I''v never been camping is it fun

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sophiar3 November 5, 2014 - 2:01pm

keep writing!!!

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saumyak November 5, 2014 - 1:51pm

Nice story! Keep it up!

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Star Hart November 5, 2014 - 7:31am

loved it

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samanthad November 2, 2014 - 9:14am

Nice writing

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samanthad November 1, 2014 - 4:39pm

Ccccoooooooollll

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nishiths October 28, 2014 - 12:40pm

I really like the story a lot you used a and lot of suspense.

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Rijk1234567 October 28, 2014 - 7:10am

I would never have come out of my tent

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Rijk1234567 October 28, 2014 - 7:09am

did this really happen and hope you had a great birthday what age did you turn?

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benjamin1212 October 27, 2014 - 11:56pm

it is very nice the ending was cool

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daniel12312 October 27, 2014 - 1:51pm

Nice

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