A Midnight Adventure

Oct 14, 2014 By Saish, 10
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It is past 11:00 pm. Your best friend and you are in your tent on your camping trip. As you are talking, you suddenly see something. A shadow passes along your tent, pauses near your tent. As you watch with growing anxiety, the shadow comes closer and pauses at the entrance to your tent and then moves away. Grabbing a torch, you unzip the tent and look out...

The night sky was dark and there were many clouds. The stars were not twinkling. There was no breeze. Everything was silent and still. Shawn and I decided we had to see what was going on. So we put our shoes on hurriedly and stepped out of the tent.

We were both very cold and shivering. It was not very cold outside but we were still shivering. Shawn whispered that he was a little freaked out by how silent everything was. I was scared too but did not say anything.

We went to the next tent and called to our two buddies there. No one answered. I flashed the light in and saw that it was empty. We looked at each other and then hurried to the next tent. This was empty also.
What is going on here we wondered. We looked around and saw nothing but just darkness all around. We decided to move towards the place where we meet for breakfast each morning.

As we crept along, we heard leaves rustling and the night creatures making tiny noises. It was getting really freaky. Suddenly Shawn grabbed me and said, “look, over there!” Down in the break area, we saw small lights appearing.

Then suddenly from behind us, we felt something tap our shoulder. We both yelled loudly and raced towards the small lights. We reached the breakfast spot and ran towards the benches. Suddenly, there was this explosion. The lights came on and we saw all our friends and teachers standing there laughing and smiling.

“Happy Birthday!” yelled everyone. I looked at my watch and saw that it was after midnight and it was now my birthday.
 

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evanv October 27, 2014 - 1:28pm

As the story develops more and more, you want to read it more and more and that is what I think gets readers hooked into a book. This author has a skill of creativeness and "surprise reading".

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iChristian October 27, 2014 - 9:29am

Cool :D

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brittanyr2 October 26, 2014 - 6:06pm

Good story
It was about kids that were in a tent and saw something
1 the boys were in a tent and saw a shadow
2. After that they felt someone toch there sholder
3. Then the boy saw his wach and it past midnight
And saw his friends and theacher yell happy birthday

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supernova October 24, 2014 - 4:01pm

I likes the ending :)

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milaniu October 23, 2014 - 1:16pm

that must have been so cool
you are really good you should stick with writing

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basimm October 21, 2014 - 3:58pm

good job using susppense your a suspensful writer

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beyonceg October 21, 2014 - 11:14am

Love your story it seems so spooky!

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marissam October 21, 2014 - 7:05am

I think you are the best writer ever!So i hope you will have many more birthdays and they do this again to you.I will be very excited when i see your next story.see you later bye!

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samanthad October 21, 2014 - 7:04am

good story

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melissam3 October 21, 2014 - 7:01am

I love this very spooky right before holloween

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benjaminb3 October 20, 2014 - 2:43pm

That sounds very scary and creepy if I were there.

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nathanr2 October 20, 2014 - 10:50am

Hee hee

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ILOVEROCKANDROLL October 20, 2014 - 9:06am

good good good good good good good good good =]=]=]=]=]=]=]=]=]=]=]=]=]=]

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evenstar13 October 19, 2014 - 4:56pm

I like the 2nd person to 1st person switch

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Kittycat February 20, 2015 - 2:29pm

I really love it too, it creates the mood >:)

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haleyw3 October 17, 2014 - 11:37am
That would be creepy until you saw all your friends.
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zoea October 16, 2014 - 1:17pm

wow

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kristopherl October 16, 2014 - 12:16pm

I would have been scared

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alexb7 October 15, 2014 - 12:56pm

That freaked me out I got scared.

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Heather12345678910 October 15, 2014 - 2:21am

I LOVE IT

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saras October 14, 2014 - 1:04pm

Wow. Love it... Keep writing Saish.

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